- Change "TO:" to "To:"
- Change "FROM:" to "From:"
- Change "SUBJECT:" to "Subject:"
- Change "Report on Payroll Screw Up" to "Report on Payroll Error"
- Change "As you know, a new human resource information system (HRIS) was implemented during June." to "As you know, a new Human Resource Information System (HRIS) was implemented in June."
- Change "Though the system was tested thoroughly prior to implementation, it seems that some payroll withholding data was not properly transferred to the new system." to "Although the system was thoroughly tested prior to implementation, some payroll withholding data was not properly transferred to the new system."
- Change "This resulted in incorrect deductions being made for federal and state income taxes, Social Security, and Medicare for the April 15, 2012, pay period." to "This resulted in incorrect deductions for federal and state income taxes, Social Security, and Medicare for the April 15, 2012, pay period."
- Change "My assistant has calculated corrections manually and I have personally verified their work." to "My assistant has manually calculated the corrections, and I have personally verified the work."
- Change "All affected employees have been notified of the error and informed that corrections will be made with the next payroll." to "All affected employees have been notified of the error and informed that corrections will be made in the next payroll."
- Change "Each person affected has been informed of the situation and invited to contact me with any questions or concerns up to the end of the previous pay period." to "Each affected person has been informed of the situation and invited to contact me with any questions or concerns by the end of the previous pay period."
- Change "I have personally verefied that the outdated withholding table has been removed from the HRIS and insured that the correct version is now in place." to "I have personally verified that the outdated withholding table has been removed from the HRIS and ensured that the correct version is now in place."
- Change "The new HRIS will allow us to make withholding changes directly in the system moving forward." to "The new HRIS will allow us to make withholding changes directly within the system moving forward."
- Change "Therefore, the circumstances that led to this problem initially have been corrected." to "Therefore, the circumstances that caused this problem have been corrected."
- Change "There should be no further problems of this nature." to "There should be no further issues of this nature."
Parent Tip: Review the logic above to help your child master the concept of proofreading test.
