Avoiding Wordiness and Redundancy Practice worksheet - Free Printable

Let's go through each sentence and revise it to eliminate wordiness and redundancy, following the guidelines provided in the worksheet.

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1. In the month of April, the professional baseball season will start.

Problem: "In the month of April" is wordy. We can simply say "In April."

Revised Sentence:
👉 *In April, the professional baseball season will start.*

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2. I bought a bag of chips because I was starving and hungry.

Problem: "Starving" and "hungry" are redundant — they mean essentially the same thing.

Revised Sentence:
👉 *I bought a bag of chips because I was starving.*
*(or)*
👉 *I bought a bag of chips because I was hungry.*

> Either one works; "starving" is slightly stronger, but both convey the same idea. Eliminate one.

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3. Apples can take the place of candy to replace a craving for a sugary snack and be healthy.

Problem:
- "Take the place of" and "replace" are redundant.
- "Craving for a sugary snack" is wordy — "craving for candy" or just "craving sweets" would suffice.
- "Be healthy" is vague and not clearly connected.

Better revision:
👉 *Apples can replace candy as a healthier alternative to satisfy a sweet craving.*

Or more concisely:
👉 *Apples can satisfy a sweet craving more healthily than candy.*

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4. The purpose of this paper is to inform you of my opinion that all family pets should be spayed or neutered.

Problem:
- "The purpose of this paper is to inform you of my opinion" is wordy.
- "Inform you of my opinion" is redundant — "inform" already implies sharing an opinion.
- "My opinion" is unnecessary if the paper is expressing your viewpoint.

Revised Sentence:
👉 *This paper argues that all family pets should be spayed or neutered.*

Or:
👉 *I believe all family pets should be spayed or neutered.*

> Both are clearer and more concise.

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✔ Final Answers:

1. In April, the professional baseball season will start.
2. I bought a bag of chips because I was starving.
3. Apples can replace candy as a healthier alternative to satisfy a sweet craving.
4. This paper argues that all family pets should be spayed or neutered.

These revisions eliminate redundancy and wordiness while preserving meaning.